Good job! I found this poem really interesting. I like how you managed to capture that "Moment" in time so vividly yet you didn't give away what happened in this moment. I think the mystery in this poem along with the strong details and imagry really brought it to life even without knowing what exactly happened. The other cool thing about it is that it is able to be related with to me as the reader even though I have not experienced this moment. It is written in a way that makes it universal and shows the value of friendships and the impact it can make on our lives, whether good or bad. The one thing I did find unclear however (if you are looking for some suggestions for revision as well) is actually the very last line. This is because it does not have a direct link to a point in the poem. I think it is talking about the colors two lines before, but I think the placement of the line makes it seem like the days are running down the face in smears and not the colors. I may have interperated (sp?) it wrong though, but if it was a little bit more clear like the rest of the poem I think that would be really helpful.
Thanks for the good read!
Brian Michael Dunar
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